a starr reborn's blog post - Writing excercise, thanks to help from readers of my last blog.

Monday, February 1, 2010, 9:47:42 PM
I laid in my bed,
My thoughts prowling,
Feeling like a cat UNDER fed,
Circling an unsuspecting GOLDFISH,
With only one thing, one desire in my head,
The hunger for you has me growling,
Only primal moans of longing are said,
HEAVING, your CARESS my deepest wish,
But we’re just FRIENDS, it’s a precarious perch I tread,

The MOON is like a DISCO GLITTER BALL,
Fireflies outside dance around non stop,
Its LUMINANCE washing over me; hypnotic, INDEFINABLE,
In my fantasy I don’t feel outclassed or SURPASSED by her,
Just HAPPINESS that you would answer my call,
My fingertips rush across my skin like rain drops,
Sensations BLOOM like FLOWERS, sweet and sensual.
I wish her nothing but the best of wealth and HEALTH for sure
But in the end I am GREEN; she has you after all.

Comments

Others Have Said: 
mdguy on 1-Feb-10 23:07:13
:-) There we go.

a starr reborn on 1-Feb-10 23:21:46
Ugh, I can't beleive I used sensations and sensual in the same line.

juicy on 2-Feb-10 12:45:38
*applauds*

Sallinque on 2-Feb-10 22:40:12
Nicely done!

(The sensesation and sensual didn't jar, so don't worry about it)

Have a great evening! *hug*

cas999 on 3-Feb-10 0:36:50
/me huggs ya :)
That is fabtastic hun, I can't believe u got the disco glitter ball in there so perfectly :) .... burn baby burn.... disco inferno!!!!
I'm gonna save that if ya don't mind xxxxx